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HavenThu Nov-22-07 07:20 PM
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#7245, "Captivity"


          

Set a while after the ending of Lady Knight, Kel and Neal are taken captive by Scanrans and dragged to Hamrkeng, where they anxiously await their fates. I know the idea's not completely original, and it's a KN. A :realistic: KN.

:1:

The day’s ride it took to get to Steadfast was not out of the ordinary. Of course the small company of riders from New Hope was cautious, but in truth nothing was expected. They didn’t know that their every move had been calculated, past journeys studied. The scouts that were always sent ahead were slain in complete silence

It was just when the flutter of the thought at why they hadn’t returned crossed Kel’s mind that the raiders struck.The attack was swift, much swifter than she would’ve believed possible from the usually disorganized Scanrans. A short battle ensued, but the attackers were all heavily built and fully armed. The few guards who managed to push their advantage were quickly shot down. Before any Tortallan had so much as blinked, their horses were gutted, their weopons thrust from their hands, and everyone brought to their knees. Kel struggled, attempting to twist around and throw off her captor, but he was holding her in such a way that it was impossible. Glancing to her left, she saw Neal doing the same thing, but to no avail. She finally stopped and surveyed the damage.

Three of her soldiers were dead, which left two more alive, along with herself, Neal, and Merric. She didn’t know what had become of her scouts. As she was thinking, rough hands tied a gag around her mouth. Harsh ropes bound her hands, and she couldn’t reach her boot knife. As though reading her mind, her captor thrust his hand down her boot, found the weopon, and tossed it aside. “Check them all,” he said in Scanran. His men hurried to do so, and once everyone had been disarmed they forced the Tortallans to stand up.

“Which of you are Keladry of Mindelan and Nealan of Queenscove?” he said in rough Common. Kel looked at Neal, silently asking. He gave a miniscule nod, and together they stepped forward. Kel’s captor snapped his fingers, and another man came to hold her. He stepped around so he was facing her and smiled cruelly. He was surprisingly clean, his teeth not rotting, his clothing in order, his long pale hair kept. “My king has a bone to pick with you. You will be coming with us back to Hamrkeng. The rest of them,” he looked around, “may be disposed of as soon as we get off of the road. Let us go.” Blindfolds were put over everyone’s eyes.

The small band was marched through the woods, forced to blindly follow the guidance of their captors, who made no effort at all to keep them from stepping in ruts or running into branches. After what seemed like a long time, but was probably only a few minutes, the leader whistled to halt. Kel was forced to her knees yet again, and when her blindfold was removed she saw that Neal was crouched beside her, and both were facing their three companions. Cold fear washed over her as the Scanran’s last words rang in her head. Merric was directly across from her, sweat dripping down his forehead, his eyes horrified. Three Scanrans lined up behind her companions. They drew their bows.

Neal shouted something, but the effect was muffled by his gag. Kel began struggling with all her might against the man holding her. She kicked out wildly, uselesslly. And then, in a prolonged, agonizingly slow moment, the Scanrans released their arrows. Merric and the soldiers fell forward, the arrowheads imbedded deep in their skulls. Kel screamed out. The men forced her and Neal to their feet, and Kel, still taking everything in, was doubly horrified that her friends’ bodies were to be left in the open. They marched on.
When they had gone some distance, the stormwings showed up. Kel was filled with rage as she watched the creatures fly above her and a female alight on a branch ahead. Merric hadn’t died in battle, but in cold-blooded murder. His body did not deserve to be desecrated by these beasts. The female opened her mouth. “We did not touch your friends, Protector. Their deaths were not ones to rejoice in; the method sickens us,” she flew away. Kel wished they would fly to Steadfast, to New Hope, anywhere, and report what had happened. She knew that they would not.

On they marched. Nights went by in complete silence, neither she or Neal able to do anything about their situation. The Scanrans were not careless, but methodical, never overconfident, always on the alert for possible escape attempts. When they crossed the Vassa she and Neal were put in a waiting supply wagon, which was left uncovered so their every move could be watched. They were always blindfolded. From the conversations of her guards, Kel gathered that the squad sent to capture her and Neal was an elite group, King Maggur’s closest protectors. Usually they were kept around to guard him, but they were also used for special missions that could not afford to go wrong. Like capturing the commander of New Hope and her second in command. She just wondered why. Why would they have need of two people who run a village? Why would they waste time and resources planning an attack when they could use the same energy to capture someone important: Lord Raoul, General Vanget, Lord Wyldon? These questions ran through her mind constantly.

The day finally came that they rode into the capital city. When they reached the palace—a dark structure all wood and weathered stone—the leader turned to them. “Remove their blindfolds and gags. Show them to their room.”

As soon as her binding was removed Kel took a deep breath. “Why are we here?”

“Silence. The King wishes to meet with you tomorrow. For now you will be locked away and you will be silent.”

“Yes, master,” muttered Neal. His comment earned him a hard kick to the shin, making him stumble. His guard kicked him along, and Kel winced for her friend. He made a face at her, but his look quickly turned to concern as he took in her appearance. I must look as bad as I feel, she thought, and as bad as he looks. The journey had not been kind to Neal. He was bedraggled, his hair dirty and messy, his clothing ripped in several places. Kel’s own clothing had suffered similar damage. The Scanrans had found it fun sport to beat and humiliate their captives on the road. It wasn’t particularly painful, but it was demeaning. And neither of them had been able to see what was happening to the other.

They were thrust into a small, windowless room with a bed, a chair, and a bathing tub filled with water. It looked like the type of room that would belong to a maid or manservant. Four guards followed them in; two untied their hands as the other two watched. They left without a word, locking the door behind them.

Neal and Kel stood staring at one another, taking each other in. Neither quite knew what to do, what was happening. For the first time in either of their lives, they felt defeated, completely helpless.

“Kel.”

Neal rushed at her, embracing her with all of his strength. She hugged him back with equal fervor and buried her face into his shoulder. Finally Neal let go slightly and slid his hands down to grip her elbows. He backed up and looked into her face.“Did they hurt you?” He touched a dried and bloody cut on her brow, healing it with the slightest pressure of his fingers.

“Yes, but not in the way you mean. I’m all right. You?”

“Oh, don’t worry about me. It’ll take more than a few kicks to the ribs to get me down. Horse blood and all.” Kel smiled weakly at the memory. “Kel, what do you suppose they want with us?”

“I don’t have a clue. We aren’t valuable to Tortall, not enough that they’d hold us for ransom. Do you think it could have something to do with Blayce?”

Neal frowned. “I’m afraid those are my thoughts exactly. He wasn’t happy when his killing machines stopped killing; they were his main weopon. Everybody in the Eastern Lands knows that it was you who led the operation, and it wouldn’t be hard to find out who was fighting alongside you.”

“You don’t think he just wanted revenge, do you? It’s so foolish…such a waste of resources.”

Neal smiled bitterly. “You forget, my dear, that Scanrans are notorious for being foolish. Just because King Maggot is one of the smarter ones doesn’t mean he doesn’t come from the same stock.”

Kel sighed and backed away from Neal. A clatter from the door startled them; glancing around, they saw a tray had been slid under the wide crack between the bottom of the door and the floor. Neal hurriedly snatched it up and removed the cover with shaking hands. Neither one had eaten in close to three days. Neal brought it over to the bed and sat down, gesturing for Kel to sit beside him. On the tray was a note; Kel opened and read it aloud:

“Please bathe and make yourselves presentable. There is fresh clothing in the wardrobe. You meet the King tomorrow at midmorning.” She made a face. “Well, that’ s blunt. At least we know he isn’t trying to poison us, if he wants to meet us tomorrow.”

Neal, who was scarfing down a slice of bread, looked at her with his mouth full. “At thish point I don’th care if itsh boisoned.” He swallowed, and promptly started inhaling the thick vegetable soup. Kel, unable to hold out any longer, did the same. When they’d finished all of the food, Neal let out a laugh that was more like a bark. Kel looked at him, alarmed.

“What?”

“Nothing. It’s just…I finally ate my vegetables.”

Shaking her head at his ability to joke in their present situation, she lay back on the bed. “I think I’ll just close my eyes for a while.” Just for a minute… She shut her eyes.

Neal watched her for a moment, sighed, and stood. Stretching, catlike, he picked up the empty tray and slid it back under the door. He then settled down into the room’s only chair, noticing that Kel was already breathing heavily, the breath of one who is deep in slumberland.

  

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RE: Captivity, tabbypirate, Nov 23rd 2007, #1
RE: Captivity, Haven, Nov 23rd 2007, #2
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RE: Captivity, Cinamony Sweet, Dec 01st 2007, #17
RE: Captivity, All Messed Up, Jul 22nd 2009, #18

tabbypirateFri Nov-23-07 10:33 AM
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#7246, "RE: Captivity"
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I like the idea. The sentence structure, grammar, and vocabulary are generally good. Nice work.

I have a minor (mostly opinionated) suggestion. Could you maybe toughen Kel up a little more? It seems like you're portraying her as a weaker woman. It speaks to poor command abilities that she and her party were beaten so easily. Where were the sparrows? Jump? What horses are dead? PLEASE TELL ME PEACHBLOSSOM ISN'T DEAD!!!!

But, in the end, it's your story, your choices. This may be the first Kel/Neal on the site. Good luck with the rest of it, I hope you continue.

  

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HavenFri Nov-23-07 12:16 PM
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#7247, "RE: Captivity"
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Fri Nov-23-07 12:28 PM by Haven

          

I know exactly what you mean. Usually I think I'm pretty good at keeping characters, well, in character, but I'm having a little trouble with this one. I don't notice that she's off until an entire scene is written, and by that time I don't feel like changing it.

Peachblossom died, just like Merric. I was in a killing mood when I wrote this. Unfortunately, I completely forgot about Jump and the sparrows while writing this, and I think that may have something to do with the fact that I never liked them (useful though they were) in the books.

Thank you so much for taking the time to review and pointing everything out!

EDIT: Pretty sure it's not the first KN here; I took care of that a few years ago.

  

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tabbypirateFri Nov-23-07 01:17 PM
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#7248, "RE: Captivity"
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a few years ago...that might explain it. I'm a comparatively new resident around here. I've tried to look through the archives, but they've taken stuff down since the site started--and I'll admit, I haven't read every story on here (though not for lack of trying ).

I've got a question: Are Neal and Yuki are married at this point? My memory of Lady Knight is a little iffy, and I don't have a copy on-hand right now.

I'll admit, I'm usually a KD fan myself, but I understand the longing for KN to happen. Kel deserves a wonderful man.

  

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HavenSat Nov-24-07 09:09 AM
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#7249, "RE: Captivity"
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Sat Nov-24-07 09:11 AM by Haven

          

Neal and Yuki aren't married yet. I don't know if they were supposed to get married at the end of Lady Knight, or if they were just going to see each other, but I'm going with the latter.

As always, Yuki poses a problem to any diligent Kel/Neal shipper. I don't think Neal would break Yuki's heart, but I believe it can work if done the right way. I just hope I am doing it the right way!

OooO

:2:

The sound of a splash and a yelp woke Kel from her rest. She sat up quickly, scrabbling for the sword that wasn’t there, and saw that Neal had apparently just stepped into the bath. Averting her eyes for modesy’s sake, she slowly got off of the bed and stretched. The combination of food and a long nap had renewed not only her body, but her energy. For the first time in a week and a half, she felt revived, ready to think of a way out of their predicament.

“Just tell me when it’s safe to turn around, Meathead,” she said to the air in front of her. Behind her, she heard Neal’s start at her voice.

“Sorry. I thought it would be the best time, since you were asleep--”

“I still would be,” Kel cut him off, “If it weren’t for you and your exclaimations. The water can’t be that cold.”

“Freezing.You can turn around; the water’s up to here anyway. I won’t let you see anything.”

Kel shrugged, turned, and gasped. “Neal, your back!”

“Is it bad?”

“It looks terrible. What ha—I thought you said they didn’t hurt you, Neal, but it looks like you were whipped!” She started to move toward him, thought better of it, and compromised by sitting on the foot of the bed.

Neal ran a hand through his hair. “I was. It was two nights ago. You were sleeping, and I’d started to work my hands free. I was crawling over to get you when one of the guards saw. Can you see if there’s any soap?”

Kel was shocked. Her friend was hurting, and she’d slept through the whole thing. Numbly she got up and went to the wardrobe in the corner, and after rummaging for a few moments found a bar of soap. She got the clothing out as well and sat it next to the tub, and then handed Neal the soap. She watched for a moment as he struggled to reach his back, bit her lip, and with gentle hands took it from him. He looked at her questioningly.

“Don’t. Neal, you risked your neck trying to free us, and I just slept through it like a—like a lump.” She slowly began to wash his back, hissing in sympathy when he gasped as the harsh lye touched his angry red cuts.

“Don’t do that, Kel,” he started, and when she stopped with the soap he fluttered his hands impatiently. “Not that. I meant don’t do that thing that you always do. You know you would’ve done the same in my situation. Just because you’re usually the one to think of ways out first doesn’t mean the rest of us are useless,” he said bitterly. Kel didn’t reply immediately, but pushed his head forward rather more roughly than she intended in her quest to clean his wounds. Lost in thought, she temporarily forgot she was supposed to be gentle, and Neal’s “Ow!” brought her back. “Kel?”

She couldn’t do it anymore. She dropped the soap in the water, swore quietly, and sat back on her heels, head in her hands. She was trying to fight the tears, trying so hard, and would have succeeded had Neal not asked her if she was all right. Silent sobs began wracking her body and she collapsed completely. Why is it always one simple question that sends a person over the edge? she wondered hysterically. She continued to sob, and when she felt strong arms wrap around her she leaned into them, burying her face into Neal’s bare chest. It took a few moments of full-fledged crying, and then a few more moments of calming down, before she could look at him. He was completely taken aback by her open display of emotions; he couldn’t remember a time he’d seen her cry, and it scared him.

“I’m usually the one who thinks of a way out. I always do. But I couldn’t save Merric," she said quietly. She felt sick. “He looked at me, Neal! I was staring straight into his eyes when it—when it happened. Do you know how that feels? He was looking to me for a way out, the way everyone always does, and I couldn’t do anything!”

Neal was crying now, she could feel his hot tears on her scalp. He patted her hair as he held her close, and for a while they simply sat there. When he spoke his voice was rough, as if he couldn’t trust himself to control it. “I do know how you feel. Everyone in our year always looked to me like the older brother, the logical one, the one who would know the answer, even if you were the one to act on it. I’m a knight—Mithros knows I’m a knight, but I’ve never felt like a warrior, like it was my place. That day, the day Merric died, I felt so helpless. I did look to you, Kel, I did think you would come up with a plan, but when they shot him and you screamed I realized you’re just like me. You’re so young, and here I am five years older, looking to you for direction. We’re just two people, we don’t know what in the Goddess’s name we’re doing. You’re out of your element and I’m out of mine. We couldn’t save him. I don’t think there was anything we could’ve done different that would’ve saved him. But Kel…Kel, know that whatever happens, we’re in this together. I couldn’t save him, but I will do everything I can to get you out of here.”

Kel wiped her eyes and looked at him. She was speechless after such a response from her usually calculative friend. Indeed, Neal himself looked taken aback at his outburst. She couldn’t help it; she reached up and pushed back the hair from his forehead, the way she’d always thought of doing as a page. The intimate gesture seemed appropriate, somehow. “And I will do everything I can to get you out of here, Neal.”

Neal quirked a brow. “You know what this means, then, if we’re both willing to die for each other? It means that—“

“Neither one of us is going to get out alive,” Kel interjected. They smiled at each other in complete understanding. It was then that Kel realized Neal didn’t have a shirt on.

“Neal, you don’t have a shirt on,” she said.

“Oh.” He had the decency to blush as he scrambled for the tunic lying a few feet away.

Kel sat back on her heels and grinned. “Oh, don’t hurry on my account. It’s been a while since I’ve seen—“ She was cut off by Neal stuffing a stocking into her mouth. As she struggled with the proffered garment, he stood and offered her a hand.

“At least I had the decency to put on my breeches, mistress.”

Kel supposed that was something.

  

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ecsluverSun Nov-25-07 10:56 AM
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#7252, "RE: Captivity"
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Obvousily, I need to be grounded less often. But, hello! I'm younger than Tabby, so I probably haven't read anything either. Oh, I guess I should introduce myself. You can call me Ashley. I really like this story. It's nice having some more cannon (or what I classify as cannon) though, I suppose I have no room to complain=}

  

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HavenMon Nov-26-07 02:41 PM
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Hi Ashley, thanks for reading and taking the time to comment. I'll try to get the next part up soon, because I know how annoying it is to have to wait!

  

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#7253, "RE: Captivity"
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Obvousily, I need to be grounded less often. But, hello! I'm younger than Tabby, so I probably haven't read anything either. Oh, I guess I should introduce myself. You can call me Ashley. I really like this story. It's nice having some more cannon (or what I classify as cannon) though, I suppose I have no room to complain=}

  

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tabbypirateSun Nov-25-07 10:58 PM
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#7257, "RE: Captivity"
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alright, now I'm really starting to get immersed in the story. And I just can't resist one-liners like that. Oh Neal...

At risk of sounding horribly annoying: more please!

  

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HavenMon Nov-26-07 02:40 PM
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#7260, "RE: Captivity"
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Oh, you're not annoying; I like it when people comment! I'll have more...soon?

  

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#7263, "RE: Captivity"
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Omg Haven I was here a few years ago, you probably don't remember me it doesn't help that I can never remember passwords so I always get new user names but I probably read something of yours, and this is really good, I always felt that Kel should have shown just a tad more emotion, and so when she started crying I was like yes! I know thats kinda an opposite reaction but you know it happens
but yeah so continue writing please because I want to know what the king wants! I also want to know what happens when Kel takes her bath...

~*Cinamony Sweet*~

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The Fox: It's only with the heart that one can see clearly. What's essential, is invisible to the eye.

  

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HavenWed Nov-28-07 09:35 AM
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#7264, "RE: Captivity"
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What was your old username? It makes me kind of sad and nostalgic when I think of the "old days." There are certain people I have fond memories of from this site, but it seems like my interest in it just fizzled out for a while. I'm back, though, hopefully for a long time!

I haven't written the next chapter yet, though I know what's going to happen. I can't guarantee it'll be up really soon, as I have finals coming up and a few papers to write, but the story'll be finished for sure over winter break. So you may have to wait, but hopefully it'll be worth it!

  

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#7265, "RE: Captivity"
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I had like five different ones one was like Cinnamon2603
and another one was elphaba something I don't really remember all that well I'd have to go back and look
psh I have finals too, just study the night before and write more now =]

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HavenWed Nov-28-07 05:52 PM
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Okay, I remember elphaba, just because I thought it was an "interesting" choice for a username (way before I'd seen or knew what Wicked was).

Okay, I suppose I could write more.

  

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#7267, "RE: Captivity"
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WRITE MORE!!!

You guys make me feel young...

  

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After a brief tussle over sleeping arrangements—Neal at first refused point blank to take the bed either with Kel or alone—it was decided that they would sleep together, as it was an extreme situation and they both needed a good night’s rest. Kel personally felt that they were way beyond the boundaries of traditional chivalry, and that when stranded in Hamrkeng, the situation warranted a certain breech of decorum.

For a long time Kel lye awake, thinking about the past few weeks’ events and that night’s conversation with Neal. She felt that she was closer than ever to her friend, and that she should be happy about that, at least. Even in the dire circumstances, however, her mind was on something else entirely. Something that should’ve ceased being a problem many years ago. Having journeyed so far with only cruel guards for company, the one thing that had kept her going was Neal’s steady presence beside her. Though she couldn’t see him, she could always feel him, and it calmed her. Just as she was beginning to realize she calmed him. It scared her. She felt like she had at thirteen, except this time it was much, much worse, and she was filled with something she couldn’t identify. It wasn’t bad, exactly, but it wasn’t good either. She felt empty, sad, and in a strange way, she almost ached. Gone were the hope and pain she had felt as a page at the sight of Neal, for now she knew she could never have him. He was betrothed, and Kel hated herself for wanting him, for secretly wanting to break up his marriage, while deep down she knew that she did want both he and Yuki to be happy. She loved Yuki as well, and did not want to hurt her. What a strange mix of emotions I am, she thought bemusedly.

Kel flipped onto her back and stole a glance at the object of her thoughts. He is handsome, she thought with a rush, and was immediately glad that it was dark and Neal appeared to be sleeping, elsewise her blush would be extremely visible. Slowly, not to disturb him, she rolled onto her other side, propping herself up on one arm. He slept at ease on his back, she could see his chest rising and falling. She stared openly at the hair that had fallen into his eyes once again, longing to touch it, but knowing that to do so would wake him up.

A small sigh escaped her lips.

Neal cracked an eyelid.

She was startled, but it was too late to pretend now. “Why are you staring at me?” he asked, opening both eyes and stretching both arms over his head.

“Oh, so I must be staring at you, O Conceited One,” she lied, smiling slightly. “I was just thinking. Sorry if I woke you.” Quickly she lay back down and curled up into a ball, resolutely closing her eyes.

“You were staring at me; I heard you sighing like a lovestruck girl. What’s going on, Kel?” She felt him shift behind her and could feel his eyes on the back of her head. “If you’re uncomfortable, I can sleep on the floor.”

“Uncomfortable’s not the problem here,” she muttered under her breath. Sighing, she sat up and faced him, plastering a blank look on her face. “Please, stay. We both need the rest, and there’s no way you’re going to get that on the floor.”

Neal stared her down for a full ten seconds, and then appeared to relax. Something had changed between them, but it couldn’t be what he thought it was. Not Kel; she would never…or would she? It was all too much to think about, too late at night. “Go back to sleep, then, Kel. No more staring.” He took the liberty of staring at her until she grumbled about Healers who thought too highly of themselves and resumed her position as a human ball.

Neal sat up a little longer, pondering the uncanny thought that had just entered his mind. Stop imagining things, he told himself resolutely. As he lay back down, he couldn’t help but think about that night’s events, how small Kel had felt as he held her, and how she looked right now, her back facing him. His friend was obviously going through something, or the week’s events had shaken her even harder than he had thought. He sighed and closed his eyes, shutting out all thought for at least a little while.

When she awoke briefly in the middle of the night, his arms were wrapped firmly around her.

  

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ecsluverThu Nov-29-07 05:07 PM
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AAAAHHHH!!!!

*dies*


*so happy!*

  

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Cinamony SweetSat Dec-01-07 09:18 PM
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I absolutely adore the end it was so cute!
If I didn't want Neal for myself I would have wanted them to end up together in the books
so when do they meet the scary scary king?

~*Cinamony Sweet*~

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All Messed UpWed Jul-22-09 07:32 AM
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that was brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! just like the rest of the story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! need i continue???

please keep writing.

pleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleaseplease keep writing. i noticed the last post on this story was on the second of december 2007. it wasnt even your post (well it didnt have part of the story so it doesnt count even if you did write it). that leads me to believe that you dont intend to finish the story. if you dont i..i..i.............will..........ummmmmmmmm okay i dont know what i will do *has a stroke of insperational(spelling check someone) genius* i know! i will kill you and bury you and dance on your grave then dig you up and ummmmmmmmmm aha i will dig you up, search your pockets, bury you again, dance on your grave again and then never speak to you again.

so there.

!!!START WRITING NOW!!!

please
pretty please
pretty please with sprinkles, chocolate sauce, marshmallows, cream, custard, chocolate mousse, jelly, chocolate chips, strawberries, purple and blue ribbons and a cherry on top?
please?

This Order was brought to you by All Messed Up (who is a Junior Frenzy Sista of '09 and pround of it.

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Rory: What happens?

Dreamlord: You die, stupid, that's why it's called reality.

  

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